Production: Script Changes

 From the previous blog post, critiques, and feedback we received, we decided to revisit and refine Audrey’s voiceover. One of the main concerns we identified was that the original narration contained too much dialogue. While it was detailed, it had the potential to make Audrey come across as slightly overwhelming or even annoying to the audience, which was not the effect we intended. Our goal for her character is for her to feel relatable, likable, and memorable in a way that could make her a fan favorite, rather than someone who feels like she is constantly explaining herself.

Because of this, we made the decision to significantly shorten and simplify her voiceover. The new version still communicates the essential aspects of her character, but it does so in a much more concise and natural way. Rather than having long, detailed explanations, the updated voiceover focuses on key points that define her personality and daily routine. For example, it still highlights how she prioritizes important parts of her life, such as taking naps to stay rested, attending school, and going on runs to maintain her discipline and health. It also briefly acknowledges the pressure she feels from senior year, which helps ground her character in a realistic and relatable experience.

Even though the voiceover is now shorter, it still captures the core idea of who Audrey is. The goal was never to remove depth, but instead to present that depth in a more subtle and effective way. By reducing the amount of dialogue, we allow the visuals to carry more of the storytelling, which creates a better balance between what the audience hears and what they see on screen.

This change also helps reinforce that Audrey is a teenage girl with a relatively normal life, rather than someone whose life feels overly dramatized or exaggerated. Keeping her voiceover simple makes her feel more authentic and approachable. Instead of sounding overly scripted or overly polished, her narration feels more natural, as if she is simply sharing her thoughts rather than delivering a formal explanation.

Overall, this revision was an important step in improving how Audrey is presented to the audience. By shortening the voiceover and focusing on the most meaningful details, we were able to maintain the core elements of her character while also making her more engaging and easier to connect with. This adjustment reflects our broader goal of creating a character who feels real, balanced, and genuinely likable throughout the film.